Thursday, August 2, 2012

F55 - The Ghastly Sight

The knife pierced the woman’s chest and tore its way in, triggering a vehement flow of blood.

Unperturbed by the ghastly sight, the man continued.

A lump sum had been promised.

He had a family to run! It was not his first time anyways.

Hours later they switched off the lamp outside the operation theatre.

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85 comments:

  1. magiceyeAugust 2, 2012 at 6:05 PM

    :) Brilliant!

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  2. UnknownAugust 2, 2012 at 6:14 PM

    too gud :)

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  3. Found In FolsomAugust 2, 2012 at 6:25 PM

    Hey..nice yaa

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  4. D.NambiarAugust 2, 2012 at 6:44 PM

    Ouch! But yeah, right.
    Another good one, Jaish.

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  5. Danny SimonAugust 2, 2012 at 8:10 PM

    Wow! I thought at first that it was a person who had been hired to kill.... Well written!

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  6. Rahul BhatiaAugust 2, 2012 at 8:29 PM

    Jaishree you can so much in just so few words:) Amazing!

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  7. PanchaliAugust 2, 2012 at 8:48 PM

    Ewww...the last twist was awesome! An explosive..kudos!

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  8. AnonymousAugust 2, 2012 at 9:05 PM

    very cleverly done.

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  9. AmitAagAugust 2, 2012 at 9:26 PM

    OMG...what a twist:)
    Great Jayashree!

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    1. Jayashree SrivatsanAugust 3, 2012 at 2:24 AM

      Thanks Amitji. Quite some time since you wrote any F55s...I guess time for one? :)

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    2. AmitAagAugust 3, 2012 at 9:28 PM

      Ha ha ha:):D
      Thank you Jaish!

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  10. AnonymousAugust 2, 2012 at 10:17 PM

    Clever indeed :)

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  11. C SureshAugust 2, 2012 at 11:49 PM

    Ahha! Great jaish! Multi-faceted talent!

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  12. RachnaAugust 3, 2012 at 12:51 AM

    Jeyashree, That was awesome. I really did not guess till I read the last line. You write brilliantly!

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    1. Jayashree SrivatsanAugust 3, 2012 at 2:25 AM

      Thanks Rachna. I did think that if readers jumped to the last line then it would have no effect! :)

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  13. T F CarthickAugust 3, 2012 at 1:10 AM

    Very smartly done. The punch was excellently delivered.

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  14. UmaAugust 3, 2012 at 1:38 AM

    Superb! very well worded.

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  15. UnknownAugust 3, 2012 at 5:51 AM

    You made this chilling ..!

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  16. SunbyanynameAugust 3, 2012 at 5:54 AM

    Gawd; what imagination!

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  17. P.N. SubramanianAugust 3, 2012 at 6:13 AM

    This was simply unimaginable.

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  18. debajyotiAugust 3, 2012 at 7:17 AM

    that was a nice and unexpected twist!!

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  19. MakAugust 3, 2012 at 9:00 AM

    If you had not provided that twist at the end it would have depicted the darker side of a man.

    Awesome jaishree. I loved it. Nobody would guess it till the end. Brilliant F55 :)

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    1. Jayashree SrivatsanAugust 3, 2012 at 9:40 PM

      Yes Mak but actually it was depicting a noble side of man :D Thanks for the comments :)

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  20. indu chhibberAugust 3, 2012 at 9:04 AM

    You really know how to stump your readers-very well narrated!

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  21. Privy TriflesAugust 3, 2012 at 11:17 AM

    Superb narration. The twist in the end was amazing..!

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  22. UnknownAugust 3, 2012 at 6:56 PM

    what a twist Jaish..loved the post :)

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  23. Deepa DuraisamyAugust 3, 2012 at 10:43 PM

    Wow! Loved the end. Took a second to register but when it did, I was like Brilliant!!!!

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  24. JugglerAugust 3, 2012 at 10:52 PM

    First time here. What an introduction to your writing! Superbly executed!

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    1. Jayashree SrivatsanAugust 4, 2012 at 12:22 AM

      Welcome to my blog Juggler. Thanks for the comment and do keep visiting :)

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  25. Sabyasachi Patra | Tales from Wild IndiaAugust 3, 2012 at 11:31 PM

    Ha ha ha. Reminds me of my college days.

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    1. Jayashree SrivatsanAugust 4, 2012 at 12:23 AM

      :) Reminds you of what from your college days Sabyasachi? Thanks for stepping in :)

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  26. RajnishAugust 3, 2012 at 11:33 PM

    brilliantly written...
    www.duringmytimes.com

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  27. Akshay Kumar GAugust 4, 2012 at 2:39 AM

    Wow! That was OUTSTANDING!

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    1. Jayashree SrivatsanAugust 4, 2012 at 5:04 PM

      Thanks Akshay :D thanks for the non stop encouragement

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  28. Anjali SainiAugust 4, 2012 at 11:33 AM

    Brilliant imagination .. :)

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  29. KParthasarathiAugust 4, 2012 at 8:02 PM

    That was a great twist

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  30. Haricharan PudipeddiAugust 4, 2012 at 11:35 PM

    Very intelligent I should say :) Good one

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  31. AnonymousAugust 5, 2012 at 4:59 AM

    Bloody funny! ;)

    That was short and sweet

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  32. UnknownAugust 5, 2012 at 5:05 AM

    Nice joust! :D

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  33. AnonymousAugust 5, 2012 at 10:39 AM

    Nice twist! Finally understood what anagnorisis means :)

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  34. The Indian Sales GuyAugust 5, 2012 at 11:19 AM

    Thumbs up! :)

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  35. ArtiAugust 5, 2012 at 10:48 PM

    That was a superb way to end to a ghastly sight! Well Done, Jaish! :)

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  36. HarikrishnaAugust 6, 2012 at 8:17 AM

    That was one epic post!!! What an end!!! Loved it :) superb one Jaish!

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  37. MedhaAugust 6, 2012 at 9:10 AM

    Uhh. So, the doctor was in there just for the money?

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    1. Jayashree SrivatsanAugust 7, 2012 at 10:39 PM

      Oops Medha, no one asked me that...Hmm!! He also does it for money...Is that not the case mostly?

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  38. AnonymousAugust 7, 2012 at 3:30 AM

    Haha This ones brilliant..

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  39. muthuAugust 7, 2012 at 7:06 PM

    hahaha...... you got me with that one.

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  40. Jayashree SrivatsanAugust 7, 2012 at 10:39 PM

    Thank you Venkat!

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  41. joshi danielAugust 8, 2012 at 3:49 AM

    excellent :)

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  42. Jayashree SrivatsanAugust 8, 2012 at 7:21 AM

    Thank you Ashwini :)

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  43. HaddockAugust 8, 2012 at 9:57 AM

    The shortest suspense story.
    Wonder what Conan Doyle would have to say about it :-)

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  44. UmaAugust 14, 2012 at 10:32 PM

    Gud suspense :)

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