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The computer monitor cast a glow
across Sandhya’s cheeks as she tilted her head to look at her jottings before
proceeding to enter the data into the system. She stopped for a second and
glanced at the panel next to her desk to confirm that the night arrangement of
lights had been turned on.
As she opened her bottle to take
a sip of water, her mother’s words from the evening phone call replayed in her
mind. Siddharth wanted to take up extra coaching for his board exams. She wiped her lips with her fingers and thought
‘The bonus should come next week, Appa. Please make it happen’
A beep and a flicker on the call-for-assistance
panel indicated Bed 3. ‘I will check’ Sandhya gestured to her
colleague and proceeded to the cabin, her white shoes making soft noises
against the cold hospital floor.
Bed No 3 at the Intensive Care Unit
of Bharadwaj Hospital was occupied by Divya, aged fourteen. The last thing she
remembered was walking back home from school on Friday. Her science project had
been selected for display at the Inter school meet and she had been eagerly
looking forward to sharing the news with her parents. Divya could faintly recollect
the speeding van, screeching of tyres, blaring of horns and being thrown into the air. When
she opened her eyes she was in the hospital bed. The casts on her legs were
very heavy and a weird looking instrument prevented her from turning her face
to any side. ‘Urinary….urinary tube…hurts aunty’ Divya uttered in a feeble
voice. Sandhya gently lifted her hospital gown, readjusted the position of the
tube and said in a soft tone ‘It should be ok now, sweetheart.’
After giving her a benevolent
smile, Sandhya proceeded to bed no 6. Mr Krishnan’s eyes were wide open,
unperturbed by the tubes that made their way into his body through his mouth
and nostrils. Four days ago, he had been sitting in his rocking chair on the
balcony of his two bedroom flat, observing the vehicles that endlessly cluttered at the traffic
signal below. It was his first evening after retirement. Moments in his thirty
five years of service zoomed past in flashes. He had toiled all along and every
rupee he earned always had a need even before it reached his pocket – his
brother’s education, his father’s debts, marriages of his sisters, his housing
loan, expenses for his children; He reminisced how selfless his wife Sharadha
had been. A feeling of intense love and affection crept through his mind as he
thought of her and he promised himself that he would spend the rest of his
retired life entirely with her and for her, fulfilling her little wishes.
Suddenly he became aware of a discomfort in his chest. What seemed to be a
minor throb gradually evolved into a sharp pain. Cold sweat trickled down his
forehead as he started gasping for breath.’Sha…r..adha’ his voice trailed off
and he collapsed.
‘Unable to sleep Mr.Krishnan?’
Sandhya enquired as she checked his intravenous drip to verify the flow. Despite the high dosages of drugs that were
administered to his body, he could not get any sleep especially at night. With
the ventilator depriving him of speech, he could only silently observe his
surroundings – which held nothing save the equipment connected to his body and
a wall clock. He mutely followed the minute and the hour hands as they chased
each other, simultaneously pleading with his body and mind to drift into sleep.
He would storm through a myriad of thoughts; throught the past- glorious days,
happy occasions, memorable moments, family quarrels, arguments, deaths, a few
insignificant moments and then through the future - worries about his health
and his family. He would look at the clock expecting a huge change while he was
rummaging through the scenes in his mind. Only ten minutes would have passed.
His boredom and loneliness seemed to torture him more than his physical
predicament. His only solace was the half-an-hour visitors time every evening
when his family came to see him.
As Sandhya walked back to her
seat she lifted the curtains outside cabin 6 and took a peak inside. Dilip
Chandran was sleeping soundly, his chest rising and falling in a rhythmic
pattern. He had been brought that
morning in a very critical condition. His business ventures had gone totally
haywire and he was immersed neck-deep in an ocean of debt. Seeing no means to
recover the lost money and repay his loans, the only route he fathomed to
escape from his moneylenders and their henchmen was to end his life. He had
consumed poison. The emergency unit at Bharadwaj had spent three toiling hours
to rescue him from the fatal claws of death.
Sandhya returned to her seat.
“Who are these people?” she brooded, “They would have had no knowledge about
the mere existence of one another so far. Today they have huddled together here
within these white walls; Should I call it destiny?Each of a different age and from
varied walks of life bound together in their common struggle; A fight against
the odds for survival ;A fight for life; Each clinging on tight to an invisible
rope – Hope!”
She closed her eyes and started
reciting some verses in an inaudible tone. “Om Namo Bhagavathe” – Dhanvantri(God Of Medicine) slogam(hymn) that
Appa had taught her as a kid. As a nurse
she did all she was taught and was supposed to. The prayer was an additional
effort from her end as a human being, a practise she had stuck on to from day
one. She believed that it helped, that it made a difference, though miniscule,
in their route to recovery.
Like a reflection in water struck
by a stone, the scene around her at the ICU began to vaporize. Divya, Krishnan,
Dilip – they all disappeared one after another.
Darkness crept in. A blue hue engulfed
her entire vision. She heard a hysterical voice, very feeble and distant.
“Siddhu, Look! Can you see that
Siddhu? Her lips are moving, she is saying something. ” It was a woman’s voice
muffled by sobs.
“Yes ma, yes. We will get Sandhya back ma, I promise” a man’s
voice followed.
Dr.Siddharth held his mother tightly,
as tears streamed down the woman’s face. He looked at his sister’s frail body
nested in the white frame of the hospital bed. Sandhya was in a coma. He
desperately longed for the day when he would see her again the way she was – confident
yet kind, fun-loving yet level-headed, soft yet strong. So far,there had been absolutely
no response from her. Today for the first time in two months she was showing some signs.
As the faint green glow from her monitoring equipment caressed her face, she
was reciting a prayer; A prayer for the strangers in the night in the mazes of
her sub conscious mind.
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I was confused a bit initially... But reading it for the second time made the story as clear as crystal... A pure story... And this topic by blogadda has proved to give out some touching stories from great bloggers like you! Excellent one! Kudoss!!!
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot Harikrishna. Its a contest at Blogaton, not blogadda. You could check out the details at the Blogaton site :) and participate the next time may be :) (http://blogaton.in)
DeleteInteresting narrative. Initially it was a bit confusing though.
ReplyDeleteThanks for the comment TF. May be because I wrote it with the plot in mind, it never crossed me that it could get a little confusing to the reader when I proofread it. In fact I had removed a few lines I had originally planned to make it less confusing :) Thanks anyways
DeleteLike the others, even I was a bit confused initially but things starting falling in place later.
ReplyDeleteThanks for the comment Rachna. As Satish commented below, this probably required a little slow reading to notice the transition :) In future posts I will keep this in mind... :)
DeleteLoved it Jaish...very beautifully narrated....touching and heart shattering...
ReplyDeleteThanks a ton Me. I am yet to read all your lovely posts published this weekend. Shall do soon.
Deletehey that was a knock at the doors of heart :) and opened...
ReplyDeletemay be a slow reader like me would not land in any confusion :)
Thank you so much Satish. Your comment made my day :)
Deletewas interesting. :) But honestly felt that the ending's cliche -
ReplyDeleteHmm...Thats why I reduced the amount of description there. Did not want to have a cliched end . May be could have done away with the dialogue!
DeleteGood one Jaish... nicely narrated.
ReplyDeleteThank You Amit :)
DeleteUff! Jaish that was not expected. Sandhya in coma, still she recites a prayer which she used to for that Strangers in the Night! I wish she should be back home soon :) Wonderful narration and a heart touching beautiful story! Keep it up.. Good Luck!
ReplyDeleteSomeone is Special
Thanks SIS. :) Glad that you liked the post :) Thanks a lot for that encouraging comment
DeleteVery nicely written Jaish..:-)
ReplyDeleteThank you Nagini
Deletevery well written jaish , superbly narrated ..kudos :D :D
ReplyDeleteThanks Vinisha
Delete..interesting..gripping..very well treated, Jaish! All the best:)
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot Amitji :)
DeleteThanks Ashwini. :) Glad that you liked the plot.
ReplyDeleteBrilliant writing Jaish! Such an imaginative plot and so well narrated. Best of luck:)
ReplyDeleteThank you Rahul . Glad that you liked it :)
DeleteWonderful work as usual Jaish!
ReplyDeleteThanks Suresh
DeleteNicely written. I am sure this will have a happy ending and she will be back form coma.
ReplyDeleteThank you Sabyasachi
DeleteJaish, The last part is the BEST....that was lovely, after years of turmoil, hope she finally finds peace within herself. Very hard hitting, but so true. Life need not always be so rosy-rosy!!
ReplyDeleteImmaculate narration...
Hi Panchali
DeleteYou have always been very generous with your words of praise. Always makes me elated and happy. Thank you so much :)
Very touchy scenario built up. A really engrossing pendown.
ReplyDeleteThanks Pramod :)
Deletewow , what an effortless writing.
ReplyDeletebest of luck for bat
Thank you Rahul and wish you the same.
DeleteDestiny, strangers, meetings, bondings, separations... all these are jigsaw pieces that complete the very puzzle of life itself. The character of Sandhya is very well etched and I love the twists that you give out in the end! Superb writings, Jaish!
ReplyDeleteYou summarized it very well Arti. Thanks for stepping in.
Deletei have goosflesh after reading this a fab read i must say :)
ReplyDeleteall the best for BAT :)
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Strangers in the night
Thank you so much Richa. Will definitely read your post. :)
Deletecircle of life. Beautiful.
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Thank you Anisha
DeleteWoow...nice narration and i really liked your last sentence " As the faint green glow from her monitoring equipment caressed her face, she was reciting a prayer; A prayer for the strangers in the night in the mazes of her sub conscious mind"...
ReplyDeleteAll the best for BAT 31 Jaish !!!
Thanks Engram. I like that one too :D
DeleteNice write up lady! Slight gaps in our understanding as we had to comprehend the unexpected :)
ReplyDeleteLove your writes as always!!
Do stop by my blog! Kappu
Thanks dear Kappu. Yet to read yours...Will do so soon.
DeleteHi Jaishree,
ReplyDeleteThis was brilliant :)
In the writer's mind does Sandhya manage to arise?
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Thanks,
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Thanks Mahesh!
DeleteGod Jaish, how do you do it? I must admit, like the others I was initially confused as well. Had to read the ending again to understand the link. I am not a very religious person, but I like how you interspersed the shlokas in there. When nothing else seems to help, most would turn to Him. As always, nicely done!
ReplyDeleteThank you Deepa. Hmm, I am beginning to wonder if the confusion here is ok or its something I need to really concentrate upon :D Thank you again for the comment.
Deletethe protagonist here is such a giver...very few found these days...very beautifully written
ReplyDeleteATB for BAT :)
i could not participate...but u can see my post here
Karan - Strangers in the Night
Yes I agree. Very few selfless givers in the world today.
DeleteThis was a nice topic to choose--who knows what thoughts crowd the mind of a person who is in coma.
ReplyDeleteYes Indu . No one can tell that . Even those in one I doubt if they would recollect it once they are out of it ! Thanks for the comment :)
DeleteThis was brilliant Jayashree! One of your best so far!!
ReplyDeleteBest wishes!!
Thank you very much Deepak . Had not got any comments since morning . This one made my day :D thanks a ton !
DeleteAs many have already made you aware of the flaws, the only thing I have to say is : I liked the plot!
ReplyDeleteHi Diwakar
DeleteThanks for the comment . Glad that u liked the plot . As for the flaws I am still trying to figure out where the confusion had crept in . am still learning anyways :D
yes, all of us do the same. If I read something I wrote years ago, I feel like prining them and tearing off those printed words..don't mind! that's my feeling.
DeleteAnd, you write good. Just write more of it. You will surely be able to amaze me someday!
Hi Diwakar
DeleteI am assuming that was not the feeling u got on reading this one :D (printing & tearing ! ) ha ha thanks for stepping in again :)
Very different plot and beautifully penned down story..
ReplyDeleteHeartfelt thanks for visiting my space and adding colors of encouragement with your words...keep adding them more n more... :)
Same here Odyzz :) thanks for visiting and for the comment :)
DeleteOne of the best posts I have read this BAT. The character you built out of Sandhya is very nice, caring, and strong.
ReplyDeleteThe part about saying a prayer for others... which in turn brings herself into some sort of consciousness is very beautiful. Oh! I think I loved your post.
Having read some of the comments, I am a bit confused about the 'flaw' people are talking about. I thought it flowed well.
ReplyDeleteAnd now that I went back and read again, I think there is no flaw. No confusion. it's all clear from my end :) Haha. but a great post Jaish. Sorry for cluttering the comments section.
DeleteHi Kshitij
DeleteYou have left such lovely encouraging comments....How would I take it as 'cluttering' the comments section?
Thank you Thank you Thank you :D So many of them coz thats how elated I feel after reading your re-assuring words :)
As I mentioned earlier on seeing the mixed reaction in the comments, I was not sure if the writing style was flawed or whether it required a little more patient reading.
Having said that every person writing will definitely have a lot of areas to improve and I am taking all those comments as stepping stones for my betterment. :D
I am so glad that you found this post worthy of such detailed comments! Thanks again :)
That's good attitude! :)
DeleteWas confused initially. Had to go back to start to get it. Nice plot :) ATB for BAT 31
ReplyDeleteThanks Crd .
DeleteJaish, didn't understand anything at the end. After seeing a couple of comments, I went back and scanned for a 2nd read and then it was clear...dumbo me...:) you write stories well.
ReplyDeleteThanks FiF . So the good thing about the confusion is that everyone read it twice :) ha ha . Thanks for the comment dear
Deletewow, now this is a heart stealer! indeed touching :)
ReplyDeletebest wishes
Thanks a lot ashzzes :)
DeleteFound in folsom told me abt this post. Good of her or else I would have missed such a wonderful post. Enjoyed it :)Very well woven
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot for reading and for the comment Bhagyashree . And thanks a ton to FiF too :)
DeleteAll the best Jaish ! Good One!
ReplyDeleteThanks Manasa :) your poem was terrific :)
Delete:) Thank you!
DeleteThat is a touching story to say the least.
ReplyDeleteThank you Richi :)
DeleteGripping narration and touchy ending. Loved reading this :-)
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot Ash :)
DeleteGripping as always, Jaish. I have one more story to catch up with. Shall come by tomorrow. I'll get into trouble if I don't hit bed now ;).
ReplyDelete:) Thanks Divya.
DeleteMe being a doctor and a self-confessed writer could not have come up with such an elaborate and emotional account of the ICU.
ReplyDeletewell done.
ratika