Friday, March 7, 2014

Fiction 55:The Attack

This post has been written as part of Write Tribe Festival Of Words.

Jeet was nervous. He was accompanying his dad for the first time on their mission. They carefully moved, dodging past the obstacles, with an eye out for unexpected attacks. Suddenly, a huge cannon ball landed near them.

The lady in the kitchen bent down to lift the fallen apple as the ants scurried to safety. 


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35 comments:

  1. BhagyashreeMarch 7, 2014 at 7:16 AM

    Ha ha Jaish good one

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  2. Sushree DashMarch 7, 2014 at 8:09 AM

    Hey...it's funny :) Good one indeed...

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  3. PixieMarch 7, 2014 at 10:23 AM

    haha!!
    Oh that was unexpected!! Good one! :D

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  4. Akshay Kumar GMarch 7, 2014 at 11:31 AM

    Nicely done, Jaish. Feels good to be back here. :)

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  5. RachnaMarch 7, 2014 at 6:58 PM

    Oh so cute :).

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  6. Beloo MehraMarch 7, 2014 at 10:07 PM

    Creatively done! Very nice.

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  7. AditiMarch 8, 2014 at 1:59 AM

    Hehe...good one!

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  8. Diwakar NarayanMarch 8, 2014 at 2:13 AM

    Good one, Jaya :)

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  9. BK Chowla,March 8, 2014 at 6:36 AM

    Very well said in just a few words

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  10. AnonymousMarch 8, 2014 at 7:03 AM

    What a twist. Awesome:)

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  11. CRDMarch 8, 2014 at 10:23 AM

    Were they red or black ants?

    If they were red ones, you could write a sequel on one of their biting missions :P

    Cheers
    CRD

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  12. Someone is SpecialMarch 9, 2014 at 1:16 AM

    Ha ha nice one.. :)

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  13. Someone is SpecialMarch 9, 2014 at 1:16 AM

    Ha ha nice one.. :)

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  14. Rahul BhatiaMarch 9, 2014 at 9:33 PM

    Lucky, the canon ball did not land on Jeet:) Very nice imagination, Jaishree!

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  15. AnonymousMarch 10, 2014 at 1:44 AM

    haha :D loved it. Canonball ...

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  16. Sreeja PraveenMarch 10, 2014 at 6:26 AM

    aaha :) For a moment I was terrified for Jeet :) Then the cannonball told me the secret :D Good one, Jaish :)

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  17. Shesha ChaturvediMarch 10, 2014 at 11:33 AM

    This was surprizingly amazing. I read twice and couldn't believe what I read. :)) Feeling like eating a cannon ball in front of me right now :P Very nice! :)

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  18. Shailaja VMarch 12, 2014 at 12:00 AM

    Oh, ha ha! I never expected that! Lovely work, Jaish!!

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  19. UnknownMarch 13, 2014 at 12:30 AM

    Wow, what a twist! Loved reading it.

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  20. Anita SabatMarch 13, 2014 at 3:13 AM

    Oh! The poor ants! What all missiles & cannons they have to dodge!!!! :) Great one, Jaish!

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  21. ilaksheeMarch 15, 2014 at 5:19 AM

    Ants! I was expecting them to be petty thieves! Good one Jaish!

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  22. T F CarthickMarch 15, 2014 at 9:21 PM

    This was a nice twist in the tale.

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  23. RoshniMarch 20, 2014 at 4:55 PM

    LOL!! Good one! How are you, Jaish?! Sorry I haven't visited in a long time!

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  24. RachnaMarch 28, 2014 at 8:04 AM

    hahahaha That was such good fun!

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  25. PurbaMarch 30, 2014 at 11:28 PM

    Hahahahaha...I loved it.

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  26. AditiApril 1, 2014 at 4:59 AM

    Haha...superb!

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  27. AshApril 4, 2014 at 1:35 AM

    Nice twist at the end ! :D lol

    Do stop by my blog too.... been a while :) i'm back to writing after a bit of a break!

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  28. RajlakshmiApril 10, 2014 at 4:07 AM

    Hahaha... That such a lovely story.

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  29. JANUApril 23, 2014 at 6:04 AM

    Hahaha....good one.

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  30. simple girl.....April 29, 2014 at 3:31 AM

    hey that was soo cool..

    P.S. - we have the same blog template ..

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  31. BikramApril 29, 2014 at 3:44 AM

    heloooooooooooo how do you do.. :)

    lovely made me laugh :)

    Bikram

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  32. indu chhibberMay 2, 2014 at 4:31 AM

    Ah what an attack-that's how it must seem to them.

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  33. sathishJune 3, 2014 at 11:32 AM

    ha ha ha... i took sometime :) Jaishwrites :)

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  34. Ajay PaiJanuary 20, 2015 at 5:19 AM

    a first timer on ur blog. !! Good twist with a funny bone that too on a 55 word challenge ! Kudos to u.

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