Tuesday, October 22, 2013

Scenes unfolded - 100 words on Saturday

I was panting and perspiring in the torturous heat of the prison kitchens as the smoke angrily sped into my lungs. Yet the exuberant chillness I felt inside was unperturbed. I knew it was my last day there. Suddenly I heard screams. It was the recent arrival Kapil; another innocent yet misfortunate soul! That horrendous monster Ranga was crushing him under his bulk and sniggering.


Scenes from the past unfolded. On the floor, I saw my quivering Reshma and the brute who had destroyed her years ago; the man I murdered. Furiously I brought the ladle crashing on Ranga’s head.


100 Words on Saturday - Write Tribe


Linking this to 100 Words on Saturday at Write Tribe prompt of "I knew it was my last day here".
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36 comments:

  1. C SureshOctober 23, 2013 at 1:28 AM

    Ah! What a climax, Jaish!

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  2. Shilpa GargOctober 23, 2013 at 2:30 AM

    OMG!! How tragic!!

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    1. Jayashree SrivatsanOctober 23, 2013 at 5:50 AM

      :) was trying to think of something happy on the prompt but could not Shilpa :)

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  3. indu chhibberOctober 23, 2013 at 5:17 AM

    Good!You have told a lot in just 100 words.

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    1. Jayashree SrivatsanOctober 23, 2013 at 5:52 AM

      Thanks Indu. I did find it a little difficult to restrict it to a hundred words :)

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  4. Rahul BhatiaOctober 23, 2013 at 7:07 AM

    A perfect finale, Jaishree:)

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  5. UnknownOctober 23, 2013 at 12:10 PM

    Just too good! :)

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  6. Diwakar NarayanOctober 23, 2013 at 12:28 PM

    Kept me visualizing the scene. Powerful writing, Jaya.

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  7. Found In FolsomOctober 23, 2013 at 1:10 PM

    So much in so few words..you told a lot. :)

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  8. AnonymousOctober 23, 2013 at 10:18 PM

    Tragic and well conveyed.

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  9. Vishal BheerooOctober 24, 2013 at 4:56 AM

    Heart pounding and thrilling climax. A tale of retributive justice after the tragedy as evil is destroyed:)

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  10. amitOctober 25, 2013 at 8:36 PM

    Painful and vivid!

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  11. UnknownOctober 25, 2013 at 8:59 PM

    Brilliant story-telling.

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  12. T F CarthickOctober 27, 2013 at 1:14 PM

    That was a really poignant story.

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  13. RoshniOctober 27, 2013 at 8:44 PM

    THat's so sad....just when he was getting his taste of freedom!

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  14. Someone is SpecialOctober 29, 2013 at 7:59 AM

    The ending was awesome. :)

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  15. Saru SinghalOctober 30, 2013 at 2:14 AM

    Amazing writing Jaish :)

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  16. RachnaNovember 1, 2013 at 8:09 AM

    The end was stunning! Great writing!

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  17. D.NambiarNovember 2, 2013 at 11:56 AM

    Ooh! powerful. :)

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  18. Alka GurhaNovember 8, 2013 at 5:49 AM

    This has immense visual appeal. Brilliant.

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  19. Jayashree SrivatsanNovember 8, 2013 at 6:28 PM

    Thanks a lot Ashwini

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  20. Sreeja PraveenNovember 14, 2013 at 12:56 AM

    Hi Jayashree,
    That was a brilliant take on the topic ! Even though tragic, the portrayal was awesome !!

    Have been reading your blog for sometime now...comment panna bhayam, athuthaan pannalai :)

    Pls accept the liebster status from my blog :) Do hop in and check :)

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  21. PurbaNovember 17, 2013 at 2:54 PM

    100 potent words, Jaish. Sent a chill through my heart.

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  22. RachnaNovember 19, 2013 at 8:58 AM

    Wow, yes that was something, Jaish! Chilly alright!

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